Comments by Ms Diana and Mrs Wong (Marks will be made known to you in class)
Nizam: Post does not really answer the discussion question. The question is not whether singlehood is appropriate but rather, the question wants to know whether all singles are indeed unhappy.
Wendy: Good balance. Both the pros and cons are addressed. The inclusion of the article is beneficial as well for other students to read.
Mimi: Does not address the question directly.The post seems to be answering the question as to why women choose to remain single rather than whether all singles are unhappy.
Ernest: Excellent post. Insightful and refreshing.
Rachel: Does not address the question directly though several valid points are addressed. However, there may be a point involving ‘matchmaking agencies’ which may appear as if the whole post sounds contradictory.
Karunya: Fairly balanced but stand is not substantiated fully.
Sheng Lian: Good consideration of both the differing perspectives on the joys of singlehood and married life. Good attempt to make use of counter arguments. The strength of your argument can be reinforced after listing both views.
Shawn: A balanced approach taken in tacking the question; many valid points raised. However, you may want to evaluate further the values raised in your views, whether they are morally acceptable to most.
Kang Liang: A valid examination of pros and cons of the issue. Need to improve on your paragraphing. Ensure that the elaboration of ideas fulfill question requirements e.g. your second point on benefits – how will this result in a benefit of singlehood? Evaluate your ideas fully. The question requires you to discuss your views on the issue, depending on how you define happiness.
Donovan: Many good examples raised to support your ideas. Ensure that the focus of your assignment is on singlehood, and not on marriage. After mentioning the benefits and disadvantages of marriages, link them to how singlehood may cause one to miss out on such benefits etc.
Hilary: Well-substantiated arguments used to support your claim. You ought to examine the opposing views to show how these benefits indeed do outweigh the disadvantages.
